Review for Dreams[Secret Melodies Challenge]

Reviewer: xiAH_SEok
Story Tittle: Dreams[Secret Melodies Challenge]
Story URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/qqqqq/
Author: Wang Jing Mei
Review from: http://jjforeverdbsk.webs.com


Title : 9/10
i gave you a 9 out of 10 because the title...is a bit..just there..its a random title..i know
you can do better than "Dreams" but i understand how it goes with the story^_^

Foreword : 10/10
The forewords were very interesting..i actually wanted to keep reading from your forewords.
it does sounds like i wil attract many readers.

Appearance : 10/10
the poster and background itself shows alot of what the story would be like,
its colors are dark showing that this story is sad...and yet acheiving. it's black background
gives a nice light to the white writings so for that the readers can read better.

Plot : 15/15
the plot is good. who wouldn't want to meet Onew right? its totally diffrent from the
other fanfic that i've read, you've got nice twist and turns.

Flow : 10/10
the flow of your story is nice and steedy. not too speedy not too slow.
just at a pace where i and many readers can stand reading.

Creativity/Originality : 8/10
hmmm...this point went down a bit..you could've chosen your own path with your
reasons for her to meet Onew...and the point that she has a diease is like a daily Korean Drama.
although it was good, i beleive that you can twsit it a bit.

Spelling/Grammar/ Vocabulary : 10/10
You have good grammer, maybe a little here and there but i understood it all the way.
good job with your past tense and future..

Characterization : 10/10
hmmm characterization of yours are good. the characters are a match in this game of meeting one another.
the main character's [role] is quite catchy actually..and onew...is onew? LOL

Writing Style : 10/10
i personally like your writing style.,..period. oh and keep up the
good work. you must really paid attention in Language Arts because this is a story of
art. [im trying to hard to get this through LOL]
Overall Enjoyment : 5/5
i really enjoyed it^-^

Bonus: 5/5
awesome.

Total: 88/105
whao...that might look like a small number. but 88 is a huge number.
great job. i would clap for you, but you wouldn't hear it.
please continue writing. i realy enjoyed it so HWAITING for your future works^-^